Alright I wrote a new book and was wondering if any of the readers out there would be willing to take a look at it. It's in draft stage and more may be added or removed but I think I have it pretty well finished with the way I want it to read, and has not been professionally edited. It's about 40,000 words, fairly short.
I gave it a read through last night and it seems to go pretty smooth. But I need help finding hiccups and such in it and details you that might need added because I read it I see the details just don't know if everybody else will.
It's an adult book with cussing and gross scenes so it's not for the kids.
It's call FATE and is about a young man, a survey crew chief, that has close encounters with death and has to see a psychiatrist about his close encounters. It's a kind of twisted so if you like that kind you may like this book.
anyway here is the cover. 
You guys are the only forum I visit so I am always counting on some here to read over my stuff. Thanks
http://jmgls.com/pics/fate.pdf
here is a link to the book
<a hfref=" http://jmgls.com/pics/fate.pdf ">FATE>
I think I posted a link to it.
How do you post a link to a pdf?
<a href="" http://jmgls.com/pics/fate.pdf"<FATE></a> ;"
how do you attach files on here. I was just going to post the pdf of it but can't figure out how.
Here is the book if anyone is interested in taking a look at it.
I would like to read it, John. ta26280@gmail.com I'm not necessarily a good critic, though. Still would be happy to give it a read.
I also would like to read it, and thanks! I am not a critic but have read hundreds of books.
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Got it, thanks. On page 7 like it so far. 😎
I found this place called wattpad and posted it there.
I attend a weekly writers' critique group. I've emailed to your business email the comments I'd make on the opening of the story.
If you ever intend to offer this to a publisher, I'd worry about making it too available to the world, i.e. just anyone who logs into Wattpad, because that might automatically eliminate it from consideration.
To summarize, it catches my interest. The main character has a lot going on to build a story around. It needs a lot of editing to follow typical formatting conventions. Watch out for switching between present and past tense when it isn't appropriate.
Thanks Bill good insight. I took it down 'just in case'. but I don't see this thing going anywhere. I wrote it over a very short period of time. It was just fun to write. Kind of out of the darker side of my brain. Nothing like anything else I've written. I don't even cuss but my character had to for it work. So sorry everybody for all the foul language.
John is writing stories about my childhood...m
I wrote it a year ago as it turns out. Didn't realize it had been so long. I need to keep up with this stuff. geez. I guess it's not a new book I just wrote. who woulda thunk it? I thought it had only been a few months.
John...reading with Merle Haggard "Turn Myself in" on the radio....
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122 of 187....Oh me...
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Hmmm ... A budding Bukowski.
Keep it raw. Don't emasculate your prose but polish the rawness of the language and the characters' vulnerabilities and strengths. Balance with some light humor.
Make the survey jargon simple for the reader.
I think that you are onto something but the reader may need more insight by character development. Who is this guy anyway?
Keep writing!
